Heya, saw your post on the Review Request Club page, happy I clicked on the link :)
Overall, I don't have any major complaints, it is good for what it is meant to be.
Would go well in the background of a game, I'd imagine.
It is fairly repetitious and does drag on for a while longer than maybe it could, but that is also kind of the style, so I wouldn't worry about it if that's what you're going for.
I was beginning to worry that I'd find nothing to critique your "loins" on, but then that snare came in at around the 3 minute mark. It sticks out like a sore thumb, too much high end, and a little too loud for the rest of the mix, it's an easy fix, just throw an EQ on there, and take out some high end, or turn it down a bit and you are golden.
I'll scout you for the Audio Portal, which basically means that your music will be put up on the board for anyone/everyone to see; it should help get you some more views :)